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Issue 5 Poetry

A Rainy Day

I received feedback on clarifying the poem’s meaning, specifically the interpretation of the speaker’s thoughts. The poem focuses on a speaker observing a rainy day; my original draft focused heavily on the imagery of the poem, but was more “show” than “tell” as the speaker described the changing of the clouds from soft, lamb-like forms to lion-esque creatures. The writing center tutor recognized this idea, but was not sure if the speaker was in awe or fear. After looking at the poem again, I agreed with this feedback.

The wooly sheep in the sky,
grazing among the bright blue pasture,
are herded towards the morning sun;
they now roar like lions 
while they feast
upon the glass ether.

As a child, I would have cowered
from their fangs of lightning;
now, I find awe in the power they hold 
to shatter the heavens.

Their drool drips down,
partitioning the light
that leaks into 
this terrarium of a world,
devouring the peace
that ensconced 
the yellow fields
and meandering roads.

What’s left behind in their wake of destruction
is teeming life, renewed by nature’s fury.