a thousand letters

Some of my feedback focused on the last line: “I would’ve not longed for her to meet.” When the tutor read this out loud, they read it as “I would not have longed for her to meet” instead. When I pointed it out, we discussed a few options, but the concept of making something tough to read makes the reader take it slow and use more cognitive processing. That might be frustrating in long paragraphs but in these short lines I think it actually helps the reader to be cautious of what they are reading.

Post author By Andem
Post date June 4, 2024

if only clouds could carry messages
I would have written her a thousand letters

if only words could read themselves
they would have cried endlessly
committing a poetic suicide

if only she could feel her absence
she would’ve never left me alone

if only I could close my eyes and forget to breathe
I would’ve not longed for her to meet

Andem is a graduate student at DePaul University, a lazy reader, and an unpredictable writer. He focuses on himself and his own thoughts rather than the specific genre of writing. He is an arrogant individual with little concern for the readers to make sense of his writing, which is very evident from his quote: “Let them not get it, it’s not like I’m making money off this.” Almost forgot, he thinks he’s extremely funny. (Andem should probably start taking things more seriously).