I received feedback about character introduction. The majority of my consultation was focused on pronoun choice and style of my writing. Reading the piece out loud was of much help when determining what words were better for reading aloud and reading in the mind. It was a positive challenge for me to do that!
During the revision process conversation was sparked around grammar, mostly comma splices. I want the youth who are learning to read to understand that commas are kind of a style choice though I don’t want the speakers reading the books to be so bogged down by the marked breath of commas to not find their own cadence and flow when reading the book. Maria’s [The Orange Couch editor for Issue 4] comments pieced together some long withstanding grammatical errors that I have purposely ruined to a standard that is actually legible.