Feedback for this was very helpful too. I reworked some of the comparisons so that they’d have more context and be less abstract. I think after having it reviewed and edited it’s a lot more easy to read.
Author: Phoebe Nerem
Writers Guild was very productive! The feedback was particularly helpful in understanding different ways some of the lines in the poem were interpreted and offered a lot of insight as to how I could improve upon it.
The feedback was very informative! I was interested to see how this piece was perceived and was pleasantly surprised at the varying responses. I’m glad it retained a ‘spooky’ sort of vibe reminiscent of the title.
“My mother told me once that your first love is something you never truly get over. Your love for a person collides with your resentment towards them, catalyzing those feelings into a benumbed state of being that renders you helpless. This poem depicts the state of consternation that happens when you don’t know the difference between what’s right and what’s wrong in a relationship.”
CONTENT WARNING: This piece contains imagery of sexual assault.