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Fiction Issue 2

Tiger

People wanted to know more about the viewpoint these observations were coming from, essentially who the speaker was. Also, people suggested using the title as a way of providing more context for the reader.

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Issue 2 Poetry

Swimming with Sharks

When I brought this piece to Writers Guild, people encouraged me to experiment with the formatting, which I tried to lean into, since I’m not always the most experimental when it comes to layout and visual appearance.

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Issue 2 Poetry

Decorative Brass Fan

This is one of the older pieces in my collection-in-progress (the date I probably started receiving feedback was in November of 2019!), but I’ve had additional feedback on the poem since then, and I know that Writers Guild will always be there to look at subsequent drafts. The writing process is always a joy when there’s a community to share it with!

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Issue 2 Nonfiction

Where the Village Homes Meet the Sky

Ava O’Malley gave me feedback on my short story. She helped me revise for setting, placement, and wording. For example, she suggested that I add details on the setting and edit out redundancy. Based on her suggestions, I also reorganized some sections of the essay and added details to clarify some terms I use. While I tried my best to follow all of her suggestions, the suggestions on reorganization were the most difficult to follow because this essay follows the disjunctive essay format spearheaded by Michel de Montaigne. The nature of this type of essay is intended in its nature to be meandering, going back and forth, and for the writer to not really know what they are trying to say until the end.

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Issue 2 Poetry

I’d like to apologize

Everyone at Writers Guild was so receptive of my work and took their feedback seriously. I received really helpful and varied feedback that made my revision process a lot easier. I love that I have a community of writers at the Guild who I know have my back!

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Issue 2 Poetry

Revolution from the ground up

I really enjoyed this Writing Center Appointment; it pushed my writing in new directions and also alerted me to what my writing was doing “right.”

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Issue 2 Poetry

I Sit at The Desk of Intrusive Thoughts

The faciliators and attendees of writers guild gave me great insights as to how this piece felt , like a surrealist painting. I refined it punctually and added a bit more grounded language, as per the suggestions.

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Issue 2 Poetry

My Character

People found this piece funnier than I anticipated and were overall encouraging, even though I wasn’t sure how it would be received, so that was definitely reassuring!

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Issue 2 Poetry

30.26.9

I was very happy to attend a meeting of the Writers Guild and hear feedback for my piece. I was grateful to hear honest feedback from other writers on ways to improve my poem. I didn’t take every suggestion that was given but I did take most of them. The major changes were structural, making sure my punctuation and line breaks were consistent throughout the poem. I feel that what I submitted to the Orange Couch was a much more solid piece of writing than the first draft I had workshopped by fellow writers.

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Issue 2 Poetry

Mired

I submitted these poems as part of the final collection for my first poetry workshop class last quarter. Riley O. reviewed my work and their feedback was so generous and kind on an area of writing I was quite unfamiliar with. Initially, I was nervous to first share these poems but Riley made the process simple by offering genuine, reader-based marginal comments on each draft. As a result, some of my poems took new directions even I wasn’t expecting.