The things I needed to change had a lot to do with how the piece reads out loud vs. on the page. I had to slow down some parts in structural ways, since I wouldn’t be able to control the speed of the reader. This meant adding more single sentence breaks in between longer paragraphs, a suggestion that I really appreciated and ended up enhancing the piece a lot.
Magnus Fraipont is a freshman at DePaul University, majoring in creative writing. They enjoy fantasy/sci-fi works, funky poetry, and collecting orange pens. With their work, they aim to stimulate the five senses with lots and lots of ooey-gooey texture!