Receiving feedback on improving my subheadings was very helpful because it gave some further context and clarity in my essay in regard to the timeline.

The feedback I received on my piece was vital for its improvement, and after a week of editing, I was finally content with how it came out. I truly think that the writing center appointment I made provided the necessary impetus for turning the rough draft I originally had into what I believe is absolutely the best work of prose I have written. This reminded me of one of the most important parts of writing – and its true purpose – communication.

This piece started as a rant about how much I hate the interface of Letterboxd, but it slowly evolved into a piece about how few movies I’ve seen. Writers Guild saw so many drafts of this piece. The feedback from the group helped me narrow down the focus and play up its strengths, and the live reactions helped me gauge which parts were funniest and which needed tailoring.

My feedback gave me insight into how my language was interpreted, which allowed me to make unclear phrases more accessible. It also highlighted grammatical subversions that felt arbitrary and out of place. I think that, because my piece is poetry, the impression outweighs the explicit meaning.

In the previous drafts there was the issues regarding narrative clarity, as well as some characters not being fleshed out well enough, or others not having enough appearances. This affected the rewriting process in which I focused on addressing these specific issues.

This feedback is mostly positive and reader-centered. It shows that the piece is engaging, enjoyable, and vivid, with strong characters and memorable scenes. The only suggestion was about the use of line breaks. I revised the formatting and removed the extra line breaks to make the piece read more smoothly.

The feedback I received for this piece helped me develop the tone that I had set earlier in the poem while still giving an ending that felt personally satisfying. I incorporated elements of the influences narrative structure both to add to the overall meaning of the piece but also to make the poem feel more lively.

I brought a first draft of this piece into Writers Guild the night after I wrote it, expecting it to need a lot of adjustment…and it did! Just not the type I had expected. My biggest issue to fix was filling in the information gaps on the page that I was filling in in my own head. There were a number of different things that my fellow Guild members wanted elaboration on, like the 13-month shuttle journey, Kali’s missing arm, and the social differences between Kali and Dawn. This led to a pretty sizable expansion of the piece, which was looked at by the wonderful Amber C. one more time before submitting, and now it’s in a place that I’m…

I got feedback to expand the purse a bit more and delve more into my relationship with Kaa. In general, it was really helpful to hear how my work read to other people

Most of the feedback I received was about clarity and word choice, which makes sense, as the issue I struggle with most in writing is my incessant need to overcomplicate very simple plot points, especially when it comes to creative nonfiction. Samantha D’s feedback helped me narrow down what I was actually trying to communicate with my metaphors, instead of just arbitrarily describing things esoterically because I liked how it sounded.

The honestly was helpful and the questions about my intention. It was also nice to hear what was working. I corrected Franz Kafka’s name, considered lengthening a line, and rearranged and reduced the words in the second to the last stanza.

During my appointment, we chatted bout a draft of this poem that I had in a more raw and unrevised version. I knew I wanted more structure and intentionality to my use of space. I think the use of shape in my poems was the most impactful– I felt that it gave my piece a new life of sorts! It created a new overall feeling and readability to the work that i feel resonates with my message more!

The feedback I received on this piece was primarily regarding word choices, flow, grammar, and clarity from a reader’s perspective.

I received feedback on the lyric and help on finishing the last verses of the poem, which help me to add a good end to the story.

I received considerable feedback for this piece, all of which I am extremely grateful for. Some classmates requested a scene between the two sisters, and so I added one to the beginning of the piece, which more effectively shows the relationship between Ana and Korē, and foreshadows the events that follow. More feedback from a classmate at the Writing Center helped me streamline the dialogue and cut back on tags I didn’t need–as I have a habit of over-indulging. Developmental and editing feedback from the DePaul community was crucial in elevating this story.

I was provided feedback on the transitions, specifically on providing a more sensory detail between time changes that connect the two. I focused more closely on the sound of the gravel road by the house. I appreciated the discussion around the transitions, as that was likely the most jarring part of the story.