Most of the feedback I received was about clarity and word choice, which makes sense, as the issue I struggle with most in writing is my incessant need to overcomplicate very simple plot points, especially when it comes to creative nonfiction. Samantha D’s feedback helped me narrow down what I was actually trying to communicate with my metaphors, instead of just arbitrarily describing things esoterically because I liked how it sounded.
The feedback I received on this piece was primarily regarding word choices, flow, grammar, and clarity from a reader’s perspective.
In the previous drafts there was the issues regarding narrative clarity, as well as some characters not being fleshed out well enough, or others not having enough appearances. This affected the rewriting process in which I focused on addressing these specific issues.
During my appointment, we chatted bout a draft of this poem that I had in a more raw and unrevised version. I knew I wanted more structure and intentionality to my use of space. I think the use of shape in my poems was the most impactful– I felt that it gave my piece a new life of sorts! It created a new overall feeling and readability to the work that i feel resonates with my message more!
The feedback I received on my piece was vital for its improvement, and after a week of editing, I was finally content with how it came out. I truly think that the writing center appointment I made provided the necessary impetus for turning the rough draft I originally had into what I believe is absolutely the best work of prose I have written. This reminded me of one of the most important parts of writing – and its true purpose – communication.
I got feedback to expand the purse a bit more and delve more into my relationship with Kaa. In general, it was really helpful to hear how my work read to other people
The feedback I received for this piece helped me develop the tone that I had set earlier in the poem while still giving an ending that felt personally satisfying. I incorporated elements of the influences narrative structure both to add to the overall meaning of the piece but also to make the poem feel more lively.
My feedback gave me insight into how my language was interpreted, which allowed me to make unclear phrases more accessible. It also highlighted grammatical subversions that felt arbitrary and out of place. I think that, because my piece is poetry, the impression outweighs the explicit meaning.
I received feedback on the lyric and help on finishing the last verses of the poem, which help me to add a good end to the story.
I was provided feedback on the transitions, specifically on providing a more sensory detail between time changes that connect the two. I focused more closely on the sound of the gravel road by the house. I appreciated the discussion around the transitions, as that was likely the most jarring part of the story.